Love
An Essay About Love
By Jennifer Carroll
8th Grade
Pine Point School
April 20, 2011
Love can be described by many different things. It can be sound, a sight, a smell and an emotion. There are loving people, there are foods and places you can love and there are even animals and pets you may adore. Love is infinite. True love can withstand storms, betrayals, fights, time and anything you throw at it. This essay is all about love, especially true love.
“The only way to love is to fall headfirst into love.” This quote describes my feelings towards love. People don’t work to love each other; they don’t slowly create enough affection over a course of time to be in love. You are either in love when you first see someone, or you aren’t. You cannot build love like you would a house or building, brick by brick. Tenderness may be slow sometimes, but it’s always there in a person’s heart. You might ignore it or pretend it isn’t there, but eventually, at the right moment, you’ll see affection inside you. Love, that giddy feeling when you spot a crush, the butterflies in your stomach, the blush on your cheeks, the ache in your heart, that’s something that can only be experienced by tumbling face first.
A couple that has a truly loving relationship would have to be Beauty and the Beast. I mean, if that's not a loving relationship based entirely off love and not looks, I don't know what is. One, Belle helps the Beast immensely. He thinks he's hideous and that no one will ever love him because he's so ugly, so he's extremely violent and angry. At first, Belle thinks he's just cruel and mean-spirited, but as time passes, she learns that he has a truly caring heart and shows him how to accept his looks and be a good person. Also, they save each others lives. The Beast rescues Belle from being devoured by a pack of wolves when she's running through the forest outside his castle, looking from her father. Then, Belle saves the Beast after Gaston, an evil suitor, stabs him in the back before falling off the castle to the jagged rocks below. She admits she loves him, and he is healed by the fairy's curse lifting. These characters, one ugly, the other beautiful, nevertheless share amazing chemistry together and are an admirably loving couple.
Love isn't bought. It isn't sold. It cannot be traded, borrowed or stolen. Love is not a tangible thing, something to be held and caressed, to be tucked away safely in a small nook or cranny in a persons heart. Love is swimming in the sea that reflects the stars at night, like tiny diamonds speckled on the dark water. Love is eating ice cream cones in the hot summer sun. Love is laughing as you squint on a bright beach and it is resting in the cool, sweet grass that ripples in the breeze. Love is everything important to you in your life.
Self Assessment: I really like my closing paragraph on this essay for its detail and descriptiveness on what love is to me. I need to work on making my sentences flow more smoothly, especially in the second body paragraphs, as I seem to lose focus in that area usually. I would give myself a B+ for this essay.
“The only way to love is to fall headfirst into love.” This quote describes my feelings towards love. People don’t work to love each other; they don’t slowly create enough affection over a course of time to be in love. You are either in love when you first see someone, or you aren’t. You cannot build love like you would a house or building, brick by brick. Tenderness may be slow sometimes, but it’s always there in a person’s heart. You might ignore it or pretend it isn’t there, but eventually, at the right moment, you’ll see affection inside you. Love, that giddy feeling when you spot a crush, the butterflies in your stomach, the blush on your cheeks, the ache in your heart, that’s something that can only be experienced by tumbling face first.
A couple that has a truly loving relationship would have to be Beauty and the Beast. I mean, if that's not a loving relationship based entirely off love and not looks, I don't know what is. One, Belle helps the Beast immensely. He thinks he's hideous and that no one will ever love him because he's so ugly, so he's extremely violent and angry. At first, Belle thinks he's just cruel and mean-spirited, but as time passes, she learns that he has a truly caring heart and shows him how to accept his looks and be a good person. Also, they save each others lives. The Beast rescues Belle from being devoured by a pack of wolves when she's running through the forest outside his castle, looking from her father. Then, Belle saves the Beast after Gaston, an evil suitor, stabs him in the back before falling off the castle to the jagged rocks below. She admits she loves him, and he is healed by the fairy's curse lifting. These characters, one ugly, the other beautiful, nevertheless share amazing chemistry together and are an admirably loving couple.
Love isn't bought. It isn't sold. It cannot be traded, borrowed or stolen. Love is not a tangible thing, something to be held and caressed, to be tucked away safely in a small nook or cranny in a persons heart. Love is swimming in the sea that reflects the stars at night, like tiny diamonds speckled on the dark water. Love is eating ice cream cones in the hot summer sun. Love is laughing as you squint on a bright beach and it is resting in the cool, sweet grass that ripples in the breeze. Love is everything important to you in your life.
Self Assessment: I really like my closing paragraph on this essay for its detail and descriptiveness on what love is to me. I need to work on making my sentences flow more smoothly, especially in the second body paragraphs, as I seem to lose focus in that area usually. I would give myself a B+ for this essay.
Jenn,
ReplyDeleteThis is an amazing first body I especially like how you start with a quote to catch the readers attention. However there is one thing that could bring your grade down quickly in this class; you don't have F.A.S.T. words in bold. Also, I believe that you only have one CM in your second chunk. Great job though!
Alexander
Jenn,
ReplyDeleteThis is such a great paragraph, it almost made me want to go to my essay and change the whole thing. However, there are a few wrongdoings. First, it doesn't sound like your long sentence belongs where it is. If you read the whole thing out loud, you might see how it doesn't work with the rest of the paragraph. It could be easy enough to fix, just maybe change the beginning of the sentance. I couldn't really find anything else so good luck on getting an A!!