Friendship In Wonderland
An Essay on Friendship and Metaphors
By Jennifer Carroll
Pine Point School
8th Grade English
Wednesday, April 13, 2011
Friendship holds the world together. Without friendship, nobody would have someone to trust and rely on, everybody would hate everybody, we'd probably be in one giant World War and eventually die out as a species because of all the bombs and weapons. Friends are people you can count on to be there for you, and they're people who can make you smile in the worst of times. Basically, without friendship, and without friends, human existence as we know it would be infinitely worse.
My friend and I share a great camaraderie, the kind that brings out the jealousy in others, the type that inspires great tales and poems written by famous authors and the style that makes every famous friendship in history look like a speck of dust beside ours. We are much like Lewis Carroll’s famous duo, the Mad Hatter and Alice, from the classic book and now hit movie, Alice in Wonderland. She is a lot like Alice in many ways. One, she is always helping, or trying to help people around her. And two, she loves animals of all kinds, but especially rabbits. I think of myself as the Mad Hatter. I love to laugh and smile, and can be considered slightly insane by many people. Also, I drive her crazy, much like the original Mad Hatter did to poor Alice when he invited her to have a tea party with him and his good friends, the March Hare and the Dormouse. The Mad Hatter and Alice are to unlikely friends, but they have wonderful amity. They may fight and bicker and argue and madden each other to the breaking point, but in the end, they always have each other’s back, no matter the situation. While they are two incredibly different people in their believes, ideas, thoughts and personalities, that's what makes them friends. People like the Mad Hatter and Alice and my friend and I share a common connection that is the root for fantastic friendships.
My friendship with my friend is something very important to me. Without it, I think I wouldn't be as happy as I am now. In fact, I'd probably be on the verge of depression. Friendship connects people and countries is positive ways, and provides a structure of support. Friendship paves the way to peace and contentment among the world.
Great Essay Jenn. I especially like how you used another little metaphor with the speck of dust. However, like in any real person's essay there are a few errors. First of all, when you say she for the first time I got very lost, so it would be ok to keep the other shes, but you should definitely put "My friend" for the first time you say she. Also, you say "fight and bicker and argue and madden" and you should probably use commas saying, "fight, bicker, argue, and madden" for that sentence all those words generally mean the same thing, so you might want to just use one or two words. Great essay!
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Very good essay Jenn! I especially like your loos (or taffy) sentance. It is very detailed and worded perfectly. However, there were a few small errors. The first one is a suggestion. When you say he invites alice to tea with the doromouse and March Hare, you might want to add a metaphor to your life. Also, I agree with Alexander how you should probably put commas inbetween fight, bicker, argue, and madden. It would probably make the sentance flow better, and Mr. Salsich likes flowing. Otherwise, good job Jenn!
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